NOTE: It's not well-written and needs a lot of editing but I had a load of these stories collected for editing, and I've gotten around to none of them so I just decided to publish them as they are.
Buffy stirred in her sleep, groaning sleepily, feeling t...
Bernard Depomme@navelfondle14, This does not detract from the value of your story...also you made it very clear it needed editing and clean up. "Portly" may not be a good word choice in terms of describing breasts and thighs of a woman. It has connotations... more@navelfondle14, This does not detract from the value of your story...also you made it very clear it needed editing and clean up. "Portly" may not be a good word choice in terms of describing breasts and thighs of a woman. It has connotations of "fat." It has a general use with men. May I suggest 'delectible," "toned" for the thighs, "rounded" or "perky" for the breasts...but definitely something else? Again, this is but a minor bump in the story...not a big concern at all. less
Bernard Depomme
A nice fan fiction blog story of what happens to Buffy the Vampire Slayer one night while being awakened from her sleep. Good descriptive passages, and the author attempts to get the reader to feel what is going on. Nicely done.
